I love the descriptions of Gregory's songs. Music is so asdlkhg powerful and amazing and it's really hard to capture in writing (to the point that I've given up trying), but you did a really nice job with it here. <3 Actually, I think that paragraph in general is my favorite in the entire piece. It's just... It's woven together really well, like one of his song-spells, and that just makes the concept of his magic all the more powerful.
lol I love the next paragraph, too, though. ~~THEY SAY HE'S SCARY BUT I DON'T GET IT, HE'S PRETTY~~ hahahaha ohhhh Sophie you're so screwed. *dies* But um. XD That paragraph did a good way of capturing that concept without making it all whiny. "They say he's mean but I wuv him anywayyyyyyy /crai" is how most people (... including myself, orz) tend to write it, but this was just matter-of-fact and you can tell that she's determined that that's the truth about him.
I know I didn't touch much on Francesca's part but XD My reaction was "heyyyyy it's femka and non-stupid Xion 8DDD HOORAY \o/" so um. XD Anyway! This was lovely. <3 Can't wait 'till you start writing this.
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lol I love the next paragraph, too, though. ~~THEY SAY HE'S SCARY BUT I DON'T GET IT, HE'S PRETTY~~ hahahaha ohhhh Sophie you're so screwed. *dies* But um. XD That paragraph did a good way of capturing that concept without making it all whiny. "They say he's mean but I wuv him anywayyyyyyy /crai" is how most people (... including myself, orz) tend to write it, but this was just matter-of-fact and you can tell that she's determined that that's the truth about him.
I know I didn't touch much on Francesca's part but XD My reaction was "heyyyyy it's femka and non-stupid Xion 8DDD HOORAY \o/" so um. XD Anyway! This was lovely. <3 Can't wait 'till you start writing this.