halp plz?

Haven't posted in a while, huh? I have some RL updates to mention at some point or another, but I want to get this out of the way first.

I'm gunning to join rpgthatneverwas with Gabranth, but for some reason this personality section on his application is giving me a lot of trouble. I think I've finally managed to cobble something together, but I'm not sure if it's acceptable or not. Would anyone out there mind giving it a look?

( would love some feedback :D )